THESİS
Music is one of the most important elements that bring the meaning to life in the terms of creativity , entertainment, social envirement .
BODY 1
First of all ,music provides improving creativity of person.Body who is interested in music can compose whenever he/she wants.Composing means creativity .Moreover love of music helps making very different kind of musical instrumants.But music is an art and everybody can not do art .Therefore ,composing and making musical instrumants require ability. Thus ,if you are ability ,creativity is waiting for you.
BODY 2
Secondly, in general ,entertainment establishs rapport with music.A person who likes night life always go to the nightclubs for entertainment.Also, birthday parties mean gift and amusement .Music accompanies to people for dance.Furthermore,no music no concert.People ,especially teenagers, go to the concerts for spending their free time and they have a good time.
BODY 3
Lastly, music helps to enhance a person's social envirement.When a teenager wants to attend the quitar class,he /she gets other friends.Moreover, anyone who is very good at playing the guitar can want to establish a band .He starts searching another guitarist and drummer ,thus he establishes rapport with people.Also bodies who come to the concert for same aim which listening to music get closer .
CONCLUDİNG PARAGRAPH
As a result, music is one of the indispensible subjects in life in terms of creativity, amusement and social envirement .It helps enhancing personality,therefore music is a necessity for our life.Never ever live without music.
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Well done Sedef. The body paragraphs are good but in your second body paragraph you had better reorganize your ideas to tell them clearly. Please make more connections to the music.
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